Hi I am Nicole am a year 5 am a student in papakura central school my favourite hobby is tennis and ten years old and my teachers is whaea and miss tamzin bye.
Hi Nicole, make sure you have your writing checked by a buddy before you publish it as there are some spelling errors. I liked the ideas you had in you piece of writing, like sports being good for your body. However, because you are trying to persuade someone to agree with your viewpoint your writing needs to be at least two paragraphs.
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Hi Nicole, make sure you have your writing checked by a buddy before you publish it as there are some spelling errors. I liked the ideas you had in you piece of writing, like sports being good for your body. However, because you are trying to persuade someone to agree with your viewpoint your writing needs to be at least two paragraphs.
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